I really like the idea you’ve chosen for your storybook. I’m a sucker for dramas, so my only desire would have been to see a more reluctant hero in your introduction. Perhaps her parents were always so crazy about these stories and the archeology and it drove the hero insane! But then the parents die and leave her a strange map that she just has to follow to remember her parents by and it leads her on this great journey of self-exploration where all the stories her parents told her that she thought were sort of B.S. are actually real and she’ll need them to survive! Anyway, that’s just a more dramatic suggestion from a Professional Writer. I still think your story is going to be great and I’m quite excited to go on this journey with this character and this magic map. I think the great thing about your storybook idea is the freedom, not just with your stories but with your storybook. I think there are a lot of doorways unopened just yet into the uncharted territory of storybook personalization that need to be utilized. There are a lot of things you can do with google sites and I really urge you to play with your storybook design because I think you could do some great things with it with the storybook idea you’ve got going right now.
Wow, your introduction was really amazing! I felt like I right there with you as you received the letter from your parents. You used great descriptive adjectives and went the extra mile to make everything more personal (e.g. specifying the rainy days in the library really made me picture someone in a library looking at artifacts on a rainy day). I felt you did an amazing job with the style of the introduction. You created a dramatic letter, yet still allowed room for the reader to ponder what your adventure using the magic map will be like. I felt like you did a really good job at hooking the reader into your story at the beginning of the introduction and kept the readers interest as the story progressed. You did an excellent job of tying everything together at the end. When I first arrived at your storybook, I was concerned about the map on the homepage because it was not legible, however, after reading your introduction, it’s clear that the actual information contained within the image of the map is not important and that the theme of the story is the map itself, so I think the map on the front page works well! Can’t wait to read your storybook as the semester progresses!
Hi Brittany. First let me say that the idea of a "magic map" has got me intrigued, so well done! I can't help but wonder who made the map, what is its purpose, where is it leading you, etc. It's a really clever idea that allows you to explore the geography of the Ramayana freely, and I think that will make picking and choosing which stories to retell much easier for you. You don't have to worry about providing much of a segue between locations as the map does all that work for you! Your storybook gives me a Lemony Snicket/Harry Potter vibe with the magic and archaeologist parents, and I'm pretty sure that's a good thing! Who doesn't love Lemony Snicker or Harry Potter? The layout you chose is good. There's not much to it (not that there needs to be--just look at my page!), and that really allows the content of you storybook to shine. The black text on a gray background is easy to read, so thanks for that. I've read some storybooks where the background is something like yellow and the text is white. No joke. All in all, I think you're off to a good start, and I look forward to seeing how your storybook develops. Godspeed!
Hey, Brittany! Wow- just wow! Your story is so intriguing. I wish I had more to read and will definitely use some of my “free choices” to read your storybook. First off, it is a very creative story to go off of in the first place. I am so impressed that you thought up a prompt/storybook like this- it’s informative yet so fun. Also, I really appreciate that the story is easy to read, yet will be rooted in so much knowledge of Indian epics as well. It’s from a modern perspective which is great and relatable, yet I know it will have some valuable information about Indian epics so it will be a great and informative read for this class. Finally, I like the fact that you added in details that added personality and character to the story. From bringing in graduation gifts to a mini-family history, I feel engaged and informed- the first person point of view was also a wonderful choice as well and adds so much. I am definitely looking forward to reading more of your work in the future and am super excited to see how your storybook ends up- the picture was great as well. Great job! Keep up the wonderful work!
I really don't have a critique about your webpage design. I think you did a good job with it, and everything seems to work just fine, very minimal so that is a good thing because it does not distract. My critique is about your introduction. Revision is part of the writing process and my comments are simply my opinion so please take them with a grain of salt I mean nothing personal by them, they are aimed at giving you ideas, so if it sounds like I am tearing down your project please understand that I am not I am only offering a different approach. First I like the letter Idea. I liked it so much that the rest of the stuff outside of the letter weakened the introduction for me. I think one idea would be to make the entire introduction a letter from the characters mother. Most of the details outside of the letter could be added into the letter which would make the letter even stronger. Also since this seems like it will be a quest story book, I think a little mystery would be great. One of the strong points of your introduction is the relationship between the parents and the main character, so if you saved some of the details for your stories I think it would connect the introduction to the rest of the stories in a stronger way, once again making your introduction even better. Reasons like why the main character found an interest in Archeology could be told in the story book instead of the introduction, which I think would be great because then the reader would get to discover the main character as they continue to read the stories which would allow them to take an even deep journey with the character. Also by using the voice of the mother in the introduction it would free you up to use different voices in the story book which could add different elements. I strongly do believe that the letter should be the extent of your introduction. Once your letter began is when I as a reader was grabbed by your story and it made me wanna read more, I was hooked. Start out with your strongest part. I am not trying to be negative at all. I am spending this much time on your introduction because I like the idea a lot. It is extremely intriguing and I think you have an opportunity to really create a terrific story book. As I said though this is just my opinion so don't don't give it too much weight because in the end it is the author's vision that matters the most.
Hi Brittany! I thought your introduction was very well done. I really like the angle you chose to start your storybook by making it a more modern setting and characters. I think that the main character you created is perfect in being able to look at the stories from a modern perspective but also have the perspective of remembering what she was told as a child and comparing it to her later journeys that will bring those to life. I think that you might just fix the letter from the parents because at the end of the letter the 'Mom & Dad' go on two separate lines and side of the page. Maybe even in the end of the letter instead of saying that they got pregnant with you and decided they would embark on the journey later, you could say something like 'when we got pregnant with you we knew it was a sign from the gods that it was a journey for you to discover' or something like that. I think it would make an awesome link to the indian epics in modern day! Just a suggestion though, so do not stress over it! Otherwise your story is so great and I cannot wait to read more!
Hey Brittany! This was a really good way to set-up your storybook page. After looking at your cover page, I wasn’t really sure what to expect. I was confused because all that it included was a map of India and it said a storybook by Brittany. The map of India was there without any kind of explanation. This being a project for our Indian epics class I feel like everyone could use a map of India. Maybe the title should be something like ‘My journey to India’. When I read the introduction, I was really impressed. This was a great way to start the storybook. It had a great choice of wording and emotion that caught the attention of the reader and made sure to keep them interested. The writer does a great job of transitioning between paragraphs and making sure not to lose any of their readers. The image that the writer uses at he end of the story was great. It had so much to do with the image and got you thinking about what is going to happen next and where Amelia is going to end up with the map. I can’t wait to read more of the story and find out what happens on Amelia’s trip to India.
Hi Brittany! My first impression of your storybook was a great one! I actually am writing my storybook about the geography of India as well, and have the same picture of the map of India as my story page image! I really liked that your introduction was a backstory of how why you are traveling to India, and I think a graduation present is a really cool idea. I love that you added in the letter, it really made it personal and added in a lot of feelings and emotions going into the first story! I thought your first story was really great! I loved the pictures that you chose to display, and your writing is absolutely beautiful. I loved how you added in the story of Sita as a dream, it was definitely not how I saw your story going at first, but I really loved it! I love the unpredictability and twists you have, and would love to see more of that in the future. As for your background, layout, and font, I think it is all really great and definitely gives us a good sense of your storybook! Really great job! I cannot wait to read more in the future!
Brittany, I just wanted to say thank you for the comment that you left on my week for storytelling post! I really appreciate it when someone takes the time to give good feedback, and I feel like that is exactly what you did. You told me specific parts of my story that you liked and that stood out to you, and that definitely helped me figure out what was good about my story and was I should incorporate more of into my future stories. So, thank you!
I’m so glad I got to read your storybook again and now, there’s a new story. Last time, I just read the introduction and was so intrigued- I’m really glad I got to read a story as well. Like I said last time, I really love how you combined the past and present into a fun story. I’m really impressed with the detail you included and the possible dialogue that could have occurred between Janaka and Amber- it was so fun to read! Also, the pictures you included helped me picture the scenario even better and the formatting you chose for your storybook is wonderful because it’s not distracting but helps set the tone. Upon reading the author’s note, I’m super impressed that you did research that backed up lots of your story. For instance, there’s a temple in Janakpurdham, Nepal dedicated to Sita and how you thought to use flowers in the story since Sita is supposedly the daughter of the goddess of earth- that was simply fantastic! It was also thoughtful for you to not make Sita’s true mother a defining point in your story since it wasn’t a defining point in the “Ramayana,” but you did mention it to back it up historically. Great work- keep it up!
Hi Brittany! I just wanted to stop by and say thank you and how much I really do appreciate your comments on my storytellings. Your comments are always so insightful and make me feel like a good writer but also that I can improve in some ways. You have a very good sense of understanding different perspectives and that really helps me because that is what I am trying to become better at! So thank you so much for your time and your sweet comments!
Hey Brittany! May I just say, this is the first time I have seen your storybook, and I LOVED IT!!! Haha. But seriously, the idea of a child raised on the stories of the epics, passionate about the stories and the history behind them, following in her parents' footsteps to become an archaeologist, and traveling on a great adventure is fantastic! I feel like I have entered into some kind of Indiana Jones or The Mummy type scenario, and all of the mystery surrounding the trip only heightens the excitement and intrigue surrounding the stories to be told. I cannot wait to experience not only the final destination, but also the journey as I read the rest of your storybook!
In your first story, I especially loved your descriptions of the changes and movements on the map, and your choice of Jatayu as the narrator was fantastic--as was your addition of the trail of flowers. The image of a king finding a trail of colorful flowers to a beautiful baby girl left alone in a field is so poignant, it's simply perfect!! Additionally, your incorporation of real places along with the stories helps to ground the tales, and make them more relatable. Thus, overall, fantastic work!!
Brittany, what a great storybook you have so far! I must say it is super interesting and fun to read. I didn't feel like I was reading a fiction but mainly a real diary of somebody. I must say you write really well and definitely have the right idea and concept in your mind about how you want to present things to your readers. I love how you chose to write your story as a traveling diary I think that is super cool and fun to read for readers. I enjoyed reading your introduction and your story about Janakpurdham. I love the pictures you chose as well and your writing style is solid. I would make a suggestion of using more bright colors for your webs tie then the colors you chose because when I first opened the site, I thought it was dull and not fun but once I opened the other story with the flower picture, I found it more fun and appealing. I think your book is great and I can't wait to read more of your stories and see more fun and exciting pictures you chose. Great job again! I couldn’t help but fall in love with your background for the class blog page; it’s so pretty and fun!
Hi Brittany! I love the idea of your storybook so far! It sounds like it will be a lot of fun to read, as well as informative about different places in India. The way that the introduction began made me immediately think about an adventure story. I think that the picture you chose of the map further adds to the effect of your story. One suggestion that I have is to change the color of the font. It is slightly difficult to read the story against the dark background. Other than that, your introduction is great. I would love to have a graduation present that doubles as a hidden map and a quest. Moving on to your first story, the pictures that you chose for Janakpurdham are beautiful. I think that having Janaka as your narrator is interesting, giving more depth to the story. I was certainly not expecting for your character to travel through time, however, even though it is certainly an interesting plot twist. I love the thought that you have put into choosing your different locations. They are all well thought out and researched, tying in to the stories in the Ramayana. I can't wait to read the next story!
Hey Brittany! I'm excited about your storybook! It's cool that you chose to explore the places that are addressed in our stories as well as the stories that come from there. The picture on your cover page is a little difficult to see, I think it might be nice if you made it just a little bigger. I really like that your narrator is following in his parent's footsteps and travelling to learn about different places and their stories. It's really fun and makes your story easy to read and entertaining! I loved how you started off your narrator's story by discussing the graduation present. You didn't just say what it was, but described it in detail before coming to the conclusion of what the overall gift was. You created a feeling of mystery and adventure that reminds me of some sort of movie (like Indiana Jones or The Mummy).
I also like your choice of colors, images, and overall layout. It is simple, yet attractive. However, maybe the lettering should be white against the dark blue background, so that it stands out better and is easier for the reader to see. Or maybe make it bigger? I'm not sure, and it's just a suggestion.
Hi Brittany! This was my first time visiting your storybook, and I really enjoyed reading it! First off, I loved how the background and picture of the map went so well together! It looks wonderful. I was really impressed with how your introduction kept me engaged the whole time and also really allowed for me to connect with the narrator! I really grew to like Amelia by the end of your introduction and couldn't way to hear about her adventures. I think having her talk about her childhood, interests, and aspirations really helped the reader connect to her. In your first story, you can definitely tell that you put in research to be able to give us a good background of the place where the map took her. I really loved Sita throughout the book, so I'm glad you chose to focus on her character! I didn't remember very much about Sita's birth story so it was interesting to learn more about that! I can't wait to see where the map will lead Amelia next and how the flower will play into that! The images you chose for this story were perfect. I also like how you had Amelia fall into a dream to transition into the world of the Ramayana. Great job! I look forward to reading your next story!
Introduction: My first guess about what the map leads to is the hidden city of Lanka. Since at the end of Buck’s version of Ramayana it was hidden from the world, and the map’s geographic location was only revealed while in the water next to Rama’s land bridge leading to Sri Lanka. I love this idea of a secret treasure map.
Janakpurdham: This is such a great story book you have so far!!!! I cannot wait to see where the map leads next. I love the details of how the map changes and is magical. After reading your author’s note I now know that your storybook is a story through Sita’s life, and this is such a great way to show it. I still stand by my original prediction that the map will lead to Lanka, but now I’m less sure that is where the journey ends. I wonder what Amelia has to do with going on this journey. Is she special in some way? Clearly her parents are because they are the ones that received the map. What will be the reward of this adventure? Will there be one? Why the name Amelia for the main character? Is she named after Amelia Earhart? This is such great storybook so far, I truly cannot wait to see what happens next!!!
Hi Brittany! This is my second time visiting your page, and it is even better than it was the first time I read through the storybook! Like before, it is very informative about the different locations in India that will be visited. You do a wonderful job at creating a captivating story for the reader, adapting the story and making it like a page from an adventure or fantasy novel. The main character seems to be well prepared for her adventure, though it seems as if even she is stunned by what happens every time she makes it to a location. My favorite part about your storybook, overall, would have to be the pictures. Rather than just posting one picture to give a glimpse of what happened, you use multiple, showing how the story adapts and changes as it develops. I know that as the story develops, I will be able to visualize it more with the help of the different photos you have added. On a different note, I really wish my parents had given me something like the magical map when I graduated high school, or that they will when I finally graduate college. I think you are doing an amazing job so far, and I look forward to seeing how this continues to adapt!
I am actually from the Mythology and Folklore class, but for the extra credit assignment this week I wanted to check out some of the Indian Epic storys. I have to say, I was very impressed with your storybook! Starting with the home page, I really enjoyed how your layout matched with the theme of your tale. The sandy title bar seems very fitting for a story of an archeologist, and the image of the map is of course appropriate considering the title! Many of the storybooks I have looked through have tiny images on the home page that can be hard to see, so I appreciate that yours has a full size map.
Your introduction does a wonderful job of setting up the rest of your story. It's really cool that you found a way to link these Indian epic stories in such an exciting and intriguing manner. Who doesn't love a good treasure hunting story? The first story of the book, Janakpurdham, had me on the edge of my seat. There is such a mystery around this map, I was worried that it might lead Amelia into danger. I was glad to see that this was not the case.
Hey Brittany! First off, great name. I really love you blog layout! It is my favorite that I have seen so far! Your cover page on your story book also looks really great! Your title "Magic Map" is very simple but easily catches someones attention. The color scheme you used and the picture really go well together. Your introduction is great!! You are so creative! What a great idea for a storybook. You did a great job of really catching the readers attention and leaving some mystery. I enjoyed the letter and it really makes me look forward to reading the first story. I love the pictures you chose to use for your first story! They are so pretty and attention grabbing. The King character was very interesting. I liked their interaction with each other. Janaka's wife was also a good addition to the story! Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading the rest of your stories! Have a great rest of your week!
Hey, Brittany! I am continually impressed by your work each time I read your storybook. I already commented on each part of the storybook except for your latest storybook additions so I’m going to focus on that. To start off, it was very well written. The dialogue flowed and picked up so easily from where you left off – great transition! Also, I really like how you mixed modern times with the epic so well. As you mentioned in your author’s note, you had the deer not talk in order to remain consistent with the epic which I really like, but you had a creative way of letting us know what it was thinking by being able to read its thoughts. It seems like such a fun, magical mystery and the cliffhanger at the end was a great job – I wish I had more to read! On another note, the pictures you chose were great and I like how you did more than one. I also really appreciated how they were all on the right side in a single line – I wouldn’t have thought that would have looked great, but it looked really good for your storybook. Keep up the great work!
I really like how you decided to lay out your cover page! I think that the page looks very balanced and that it allows for the eye to not feel so overwhelmed and cluttered. I really like the colors you picked and that they fit so nicely with the map picture you placed! I like that the picture is in the center of the page, I feel that when they are off to one side or the other they distract the reader from really getting all they can from the page, so great job!
Wow I really love your overall theme! I wasn’t competently sure what to think the story was going to be like when I was on your cover page. I felt there were many different approached you could take. After reading your story ‘Graduation Present’ I felt that I had gained much more of an understanding! I think it is such a great idea to give the daughter the map and have her follow it and go make her own adventures. I love the idea of traveling right after completing school. Overall great job so far and I want to come back and read some more in the future!
I love your newest story in your storybook! I like your detailed description of the places she travels, and that you focus more on the places then what actually happens to her. Not only does this allow for the reader to experience the place she is in, it also allows for great cliffhangers (which is just what you have done). I found it cool that you had the deer that took Rama away also took Amelia away to her next destination. It could be argued that the deer took Rama away to the next stage in his life's journey, and this is what the deer did for Amelia. As I was reading I did question where the deer came from because in the story he was shot by Rama after he found out he was being tricked. I really hope that you finish your storybook because I really really really want to know what awaits Amelia at the end of her journey. I want to know why along the way each character tells her that she is special. How is she special? There is too much left unanswered for it to stop right here. I cannot wait for you next story!!
This was my first chance to look at your storybook page. I think your page was the best design I have seen yet. It was very aesthetically pleasing and had a continuous theme that really made it pop out to me personally. I enjoyed your central idea for your writing, and it reminded me of the idea I originally considered when trying to flesh out my storybook. One of the reasons I took this course was to better understand some of the geography and physical layout of India, so it made me happy to see someone else who was also clearly interested in it as well. I think it would be really interesting to see all of the icons from the story as statues in Janakpurdham. I think Ms. Gibbs needs to start an abroad version of this class so this can happen. They could probably use your storybook page as a preview to start their journey! I like how you used the author's note to indicate the factual information from your story, as in how there is actually a temple dedicated to Sita in Janakpurdham. Traveling to this place and seeing all of these things in real life would be like finding places dedicated to a fairy tale character. "This is where Humpty Dumpty actually came tumbling down!" Haha.
Hi Brittany! I believe this is the first time for me to visit your storybook, so I’ll read and comment on all of it. I tend to write my notes as I read, but that wasn’t the case here because: 1. It was too exciting and 2. There really weren’t any places besides a few minor things in the third story with very awkward wording or bad grammatical errors. Great details in the introduction! It builds up my excitement and anticipation well, too! All through the storybook you keep up the same level of mystery and excitement. I like how you use multiple pictures on each page. It helps to give a better idea of the setting and what’s going on. In the author’s note for the last story you talk about wondering how to finish it. Whatever happens, don’t forget to bring Amelia back to the present and give her parents’ reactions. I really like the concept you chose to explore! You do such a great job of telling an exciting adventure story! I’m anxious to see what Sita brings to Amelia and the rest of the story in the next addition. It really looks great! Keep up the good work!
Hey Brittany! What with the free choices this week, I decided to revisit your storybook as I haven’t gotten to read it in the past few weeks. And—may I just say—I am still loving it!! The whole magic map/treasure hunt aspect of your story still gives me a thrill of adventure when I read your stories, and I have always loved a hint of mystery.
In your story, “Chitrakuta Forest,” I like how you have a variety of different pictures along the side to set the scene. It really helps the reader (aka me, haha) get into the scene without you having to use overly much description. I also liked how you took a lot of creative with the appearance of the deer—who in the stories was simply golden, but you made sculpture-esque, embedded with stones and gems. And then when you went from such a gorgeous creature and made the next step on the quest a horrifying forest, the contrast really worked to your advantage, emphasizing the beauty of Sita’s favorite place (a nice touch!) and the horror of the destination to come up next. Overall, fantastic job! I cannot wait to finish reading your storybook!
Hi Brittany! I chose to read your storybook this week as one of my free choices because I had read your way earlier in the semester, and I remember just LOVING it! I love the idea of you writing about your journey of your graduation present, I think it is such an exciting idea. Your storybook is really relatable, because this very well could actually happen, I'm sure many people have gotten a trip to India for their graduation present! I chose to read your second story since I had read your first one last time. I love the images that you added, they were the first thing that I noticed. I really liked that you talked about the actually city first and then transitioned into your story about Sita and her life before Rama. I don't really remember reading about this in the readings, so it was fun to be refreshed and to learn something new. I also really like that you are telling your stories in first person, it really makes it more personable and feels like we are listening to a story that someone is actually tell you personally. You have done a GREAT job, and I have really enjoyed reading your storybook!
Brittany, I really like the set up of your storybook. I think your introduction is endearing and kind of pulls ties on my heart when you speak about her parents. Your are doing a great job of pulling your readers in here! I think that is such a sweet way to start out your story, with her parents giving her the gift of not only travel, but also the opportunity to fulfill their unfinished adventure!
I like the image you have added for your first story. It could have been a little larger, but I can still tell what you are trying to show us! All of the details you have added to your story are just so creative. The talons on the compass and just all of your descriptions of your surroundings are just amazing. You are giving your readers a great opportunity to truly understand the story and where we are placed.
Ahh! She dreams too! So interesting. I love all of the details and creativity you place in your stories. I would have never thought to write a story like this. You must be a writing major of some kind. Or maybe you are just gifted. Maybe both!
Reading your author’s note on your first story: I did not know that temple was really present and dedicated to Sita. How cool that you would take such aspects into consideration. I cant wait to read more about Sita’s life in your eyes!
Skimming over your other stories so I can get a full understanding of what is going on: I just love how you incorporated the deer in your story. The fact that you have taken such attention to upholding certain details of the original story (the deer, the river..etc.) in your own really adds a more realistic theme! When the deer took our character into the clouds and things began shape-shifting I was a little lost… I wanted this story to be more of a realistic take of what a real person could do with their time traveling in India, however I still think you are telling an incredible story. I liked when she said “yes I realize I sound crazy at this point.” That kind of helped me understand that this was all new to her and she realized it did not seem real. It helps the reader really feel closer to her! I think you are doing such a terrific job and I cannot wait to see where Sita ends up in your final story!
Hi Brittany! Since we had the free choice of any of the storybooks in the class, I decided to revisit your page to check on the progress that you've made since last I saw it. When I read your intro before, it definitely caught my attention. I love traveling, so a story involving someone with a magic map and unlimited funds sounded like it was right up my alley. As I said before, the design and layout of your storybook looks great. It's easy on the eyes and reads well, though you might want to proofread your stories again just to correct a few of the minor structural mistakes I noticed while reading. It was smart to focus your storybook on Sita. You've done a great job of staying centered on her while providing readers with information about other places and people we came to know throughout the epic. Overall, I think your storybook is a huge success. It was fun, adventurous, and it managed to keep me on my toes as I joined the main character on her strange journey. I think I need to find some patents like hers! :P Keep up the good work--the semester is almost through!
Hi Brittany! This is my second trip to your storybook about the Magic Map and I am glad that I returned to comment on your storybook again! I love traveling a lot, even though I do not have much time to travel, so naturally, your storybook was of interest to me. I can see your passion to travel throughout your storybook and your creativeness is really shown in all of your stories and introduction. Your design and layout looks great, just like last time! I think it looks really cool to see your completed storybook because it shows how much hard work and effort you have put into it over the semester. Your color choice for both your blog and your storybook is really nice as well. It gives it a warm feeling that is easy to have in the background while reading your creative stories! I like how you focus your storybook on Sita. I think she is such a dynamic character that it is easy to follow and get creative with her. Overall, I think your storybook is really one of the best I have read so far. From the layout, to the introduction, your storybook shows your passion for travel and creativeness!
Hey Brittany! I really enjoyed this storybook. This had a really great theme and really can get the readers interested in what is going on. I remember the first time I came to just read the introduction. I was in awe at how much it was better compared to mine, but now I just see that you did a hundred times better than mine. This was a really great storybook and the theme was quite unique, which always kept the readers interested. The stories you chose to tell took the readers through parts of the Ramayana in manners that I haven’t heard before. My favorite story out of the three was the story of Hanuman. I just really enjoyed Hanuman’s story because he is one of my favorite characters and the dialogue for him is exactly like what I would expect from him. I also really enjoyed the story of the deer. In the actual story the deer is killed, but you rather chose to keep it alive and lead Amelia to its next location. That was quite interesting and really added to the storybook. I can’t believe how much your storybook has developed and how great of a job you have done. This was one of the greatest storybooks I have read so far.
Hey good afternoon Brittany! I just finished reading your Storybook and I have to say, it was absolutely fantastic. First off I really liked the background, it really made the explorer vibe noticeable. It also wasn’t anything super colorful or abrasive like some storybooks. The format also made it easy to navigate and go from one story to the next. Your choice of font was well chosen as well, It made the reading easy on the eyes and wasn’t anything too hard to difficult to decipher. As for the story, the imagery and creativity truly pulled me in. The touring around these beautiful places made me want to travel along the map myself. I feel as though you highlighted the character’s feelings very well. I was able to actually connect and imagine the characters feelings of wonderment. The pictures you chose to add to each story was great because you could actually put an image to the awesome things you described. All the pictures were also very high quality and were for the most part pictures I had never seen before. One thing I do wish you would have added to the story was the conversation of Amelia and Sita. It was a real pleasure reading your Storybook. Best of luck with the rest of the semester.
I really like the idea you’ve chosen for your storybook. I’m a sucker for dramas, so my only desire would have been to see a more reluctant hero in your introduction. Perhaps her parents were always so crazy about these stories and the archeology and it drove the hero insane! But then the parents die and leave her a strange map that she just has to follow to remember her parents by and it leads her on this great journey of self-exploration where all the stories her parents told her that she thought were sort of B.S. are actually real and she’ll need them to survive! Anyway, that’s just a more dramatic suggestion from a Professional Writer. I still think your story is going to be great and I’m quite excited to go on this journey with this character and this magic map. I think the great thing about your storybook idea is the freedom, not just with your stories but with your storybook. I think there are a lot of doorways unopened just yet into the uncharted territory of storybook personalization that need to be utilized. There are a lot of things you can do with google sites and I really urge you to play with your storybook design because I think you could do some great things with it with the storybook idea you’ve got going right now.
ReplyDeleteWow, your introduction was really amazing! I felt like I right there with you as you received the letter from your parents. You used great descriptive adjectives and went the extra mile to make everything more personal (e.g. specifying the rainy days in the library really made me picture someone in a library looking at artifacts on a rainy day). I felt you did an amazing job with the style of the introduction. You created a dramatic letter, yet still allowed room for the reader to ponder what your adventure using the magic map will be like. I felt like you did a really good job at hooking the reader into your story at the beginning of the introduction and kept the readers interest as the story progressed. You did an excellent job of tying everything together at the end. When I first arrived at your storybook, I was concerned about the map on the homepage because it was not legible, however, after reading your introduction, it’s clear that the actual information contained within the image of the map is not important and that the theme of the story is the map itself, so I think the map on the front page works well! Can’t wait to read your storybook as the semester progresses!
ReplyDeleteHi Brittany. First let me say that the idea of a "magic map" has got me intrigued, so well done! I can't help but wonder who made the map, what is its purpose, where is it leading you, etc. It's a really clever idea that allows you to explore the geography of the Ramayana freely, and I think that will make picking and choosing which stories to retell much easier for you. You don't have to worry about providing much of a segue between locations as the map does all that work for you! Your storybook gives me a Lemony Snicket/Harry Potter vibe with the magic and archaeologist parents, and I'm pretty sure that's a good thing! Who doesn't love Lemony Snicker or Harry Potter? The layout you chose is good. There's not much to it (not that there needs to be--just look at my page!), and that really allows the content of you storybook to shine. The black text on a gray background is easy to read, so thanks for that. I've read some storybooks where the background is something like yellow and the text is white. No joke. All in all, I think you're off to a good start, and I look forward to seeing how your storybook develops. Godspeed!
ReplyDeleteHey, Brittany! Wow- just wow! Your story is so intriguing. I wish I had more to read and will definitely use some of my “free choices” to read your storybook. First off, it is a very creative story to go off of in the first place. I am so impressed that you thought up a prompt/storybook like this- it’s informative yet so fun. Also, I really appreciate that the story is easy to read, yet will be rooted in so much knowledge of Indian epics as well. It’s from a modern perspective which is great and relatable, yet I know it will have some valuable information about Indian epics so it will be a great and informative read for this class. Finally, I like the fact that you added in details that added personality and character to the story. From bringing in graduation gifts to a mini-family history, I feel engaged and informed- the first person point of view was also a wonderful choice as well and adds so much. I am definitely looking forward to reading more of your work in the future and am super excited to see how your storybook ends up- the picture was great as well. Great job! Keep up the wonderful work!
ReplyDeleteI really don't have a critique about your webpage design. I think you did a good job with it, and everything seems to work just fine, very minimal so that is a good thing because it does not distract. My critique is about your introduction. Revision is part of the writing process and my comments are simply my opinion so please take them with a grain of salt I mean nothing personal by them, they are aimed at giving you ideas, so if it sounds like I am tearing down your project please understand that I am not I am only offering a different approach. First I like the letter Idea. I liked it so much that the rest of the stuff outside of the letter weakened the introduction for me. I think one idea would be to make the entire introduction a letter from the characters mother. Most of the details outside of the letter could be added into the letter which would make the letter even stronger. Also since this seems like it will be a quest story book, I think a little mystery would be great. One of the strong points of your introduction is the relationship between the parents and the main character, so if you saved some of the details for your stories I think it would connect the introduction to the rest of the stories in a stronger way, once again making your introduction even better. Reasons like why the main character found an interest in Archeology could be told in the story book instead of the introduction, which I think would be great because then the reader would get to discover the main character as they continue to read the stories which would allow them to take an even deep journey with the character. Also by using the voice of the mother in the introduction it would free you up to use different voices in the story book which could add different elements. I strongly do believe that the letter should be the extent of your introduction. Once your letter began is when I as a reader was grabbed by your story and it made me wanna read more, I was hooked. Start out with your strongest part. I am not trying to be negative at all. I am spending this much time on your introduction because I like the idea a lot. It is extremely intriguing and I think you have an opportunity to really create a terrific story book. As I said though this is just my opinion so don't don't give it too much weight because in the end it is the author's vision that matters the most.
ReplyDeleteHi Brittany! I thought your introduction was very well done. I really like the angle you chose to start your storybook by making it a more modern setting and characters. I think that the main character you created is perfect in being able to look at the stories from a modern perspective but also have the perspective of remembering what she was told as a child and comparing it to her later journeys that will bring those to life. I think that you might just fix the letter from the parents because at the end of the letter the 'Mom & Dad' go on two separate lines and side of the page. Maybe even in the end of the letter instead of saying that they got pregnant with you and decided they would embark on the journey later, you could say something like 'when we got pregnant with you we knew it was a sign from the gods that it was a journey for you to discover' or something like that. I think it would make an awesome link to the indian epics in modern day! Just a suggestion though, so do not stress over it! Otherwise your story is so great and I cannot wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteHey Brittany! This was a really good way to set-up your storybook page. After looking at your cover page, I wasn’t really sure what to expect. I was confused because all that it included was a map of India and it said a storybook by Brittany. The map of India was there without any kind of explanation. This being a project for our Indian epics class I feel like everyone could use a map of India. Maybe the title should be something like ‘My journey to India’. When I read the introduction, I was really impressed. This was a great way to start the storybook. It had a great choice of wording and emotion that caught the attention of the reader and made sure to keep them interested. The writer does a great job of transitioning between paragraphs and making sure not to lose any of their readers. The image that the writer uses at he end of the story was great. It had so much to do with the image and got you thinking about what is going to happen next and where Amelia is going to end up with the map. I can’t wait to read more of the story and find out what happens on Amelia’s trip to India.
ReplyDeleteHi Brittany! My first impression of your storybook was a great one! I actually am writing my storybook about the geography of India as well, and have the same picture of the map of India as my story page image! I really liked that your introduction was a backstory of how why you are traveling to India, and I think a graduation present is a really cool idea. I love that you added in the letter, it really made it personal and added in a lot of feelings and emotions going into the first story! I thought your first story was really great! I loved the pictures that you chose to display, and your writing is absolutely beautiful. I loved how you added in the story of Sita as a dream, it was definitely not how I saw your story going at first, but I really loved it! I love the unpredictability and twists you have, and would love to see more of that in the future. As for your background, layout, and font, I think it is all really great and definitely gives us a good sense of your storybook! Really great job! I cannot wait to read more in the future!
ReplyDeleteBrittany, I just wanted to say thank you for the comment that you left on my week for storytelling post! I really appreciate it when someone takes the time to give good feedback, and I feel like that is exactly what you did. You told me specific parts of my story that you liked and that stood out to you, and that definitely helped me figure out what was good about my story and was I should incorporate more of into my future stories. So, thank you!
ReplyDeleteI’m so glad I got to read your storybook again and now, there’s a new story. Last time, I just read the introduction and was so intrigued- I’m really glad I got to read a story as well. Like I said last time, I really love how you combined the past and present into a fun story. I’m really impressed with the detail you included and the possible dialogue that could have occurred between Janaka and Amber- it was so fun to read! Also, the pictures you included helped me picture the scenario even better and the formatting you chose for your storybook is wonderful because it’s not distracting but helps set the tone. Upon reading the author’s note, I’m super impressed that you did research that backed up lots of your story. For instance, there’s a temple in Janakpurdham, Nepal dedicated to Sita and how you thought to use flowers in the story since Sita is supposedly the daughter of the goddess of earth- that was simply fantastic! It was also thoughtful for you to not make Sita’s true mother a defining point in your story since it wasn’t a defining point in the “Ramayana,” but you did mention it to back it up historically. Great work- keep it up!
ReplyDeleteHi Brittany! I just wanted to stop by and say thank you and how much I really do appreciate your comments on my storytellings. Your comments are always so insightful and make me feel like a good writer but also that I can improve in some ways. You have a very good sense of understanding different perspectives and that really helps me because that is what I am trying to become better at! So thank you so much for your time and your sweet comments!
ReplyDeleteHey Brittany! May I just say, this is the first time I have seen your storybook, and I LOVED IT!!! Haha. But seriously, the idea of a child raised on the stories of the epics, passionate about the stories and the history behind them, following in her parents' footsteps to become an archaeologist, and traveling on a great adventure is fantastic! I feel like I have entered into some kind of Indiana Jones or The Mummy type scenario, and all of the mystery surrounding the trip only heightens the excitement and intrigue surrounding the stories to be told. I cannot wait to experience not only the final destination, but also the journey as I read the rest of your storybook!
ReplyDeleteIn your first story, I especially loved your descriptions of the changes and movements on the map, and your choice of Jatayu as the narrator was fantastic--as was your addition of the trail of flowers. The image of a king finding a trail of colorful flowers to a beautiful baby girl left alone in a field is so poignant, it's simply perfect!! Additionally, your incorporation of real places along with the stories helps to ground the tales, and make them more relatable. Thus, overall, fantastic work!!
Brittany, what a great storybook you have so far! I must say it is super interesting and fun to read. I didn't feel like I was reading a fiction but mainly a real diary of somebody. I must say you write really well and definitely have the right idea and concept in your mind about how you want to present things to your readers. I love how you chose to write your story as a traveling diary I think that is super cool and fun to read for readers. I enjoyed reading your introduction and your story about Janakpurdham. I love the pictures you chose as well and your writing style is solid. I would make a suggestion of using more bright colors for your webs tie then the colors you chose because when I first opened the site, I thought it was dull and not fun but once I opened the other story with the flower picture, I found it more fun and appealing. I think your book is great and I can't wait to read more of your stories and see more fun and exciting pictures you chose. Great job again! I couldn’t help but fall in love with your background for the class blog page; it’s so pretty and fun!
ReplyDeleteHi Brittany! I love the idea of your storybook so far! It sounds like it will be a lot of fun to read, as well as informative about different places in India. The way that the introduction began made me immediately think about an adventure story. I think that the picture you chose of the map further adds to the effect of your story. One suggestion that I have is to change the color of the font. It is slightly difficult to read the story against the dark background. Other than that, your introduction is great. I would love to have a graduation present that doubles as a hidden map and a quest. Moving on to your first story, the pictures that you chose for Janakpurdham are beautiful. I think that having Janaka as your narrator is interesting, giving more depth to the story. I was certainly not expecting for your character to travel through time, however, even though it is certainly an interesting plot twist. I love the thought that you have put into choosing your different locations. They are all well thought out and researched, tying in to the stories in the Ramayana. I can't wait to read the next story!
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ReplyDeleteI'm excited about your storybook! It's cool that you chose to explore the places that are addressed in our stories as well as the stories that come from there. The picture on your cover page is a little difficult to see, I think it might be nice if you made it just a little bigger.
I really like that your narrator is following in his parent's footsteps and travelling to learn about different places and their stories. It's really fun and makes your story easy to read and entertaining! I loved how you started off your narrator's story by discussing the graduation present. You didn't just say what it was, but described it in detail before coming to the conclusion of what the overall gift was. You created a feeling of mystery and adventure that reminds me of some sort of movie (like Indiana Jones or The Mummy).
I also like your choice of colors, images, and overall layout. It is simple, yet attractive. However, maybe the lettering should be white against the dark blue background, so that it stands out better and is easier for the reader to see. Or maybe make it bigger? I'm not sure, and it's just a suggestion.
Great job!
Hi Brittany! This was my first time visiting your storybook, and I really enjoyed reading it! First off, I loved how the background and picture of the map went so well together! It looks wonderful. I was really impressed with how your introduction kept me engaged the whole time and also really allowed for me to connect with the narrator! I really grew to like Amelia by the end of your introduction and couldn't way to hear about her adventures. I think having her talk about her childhood, interests, and aspirations really helped the reader connect to her. In your first story, you can definitely tell that you put in research to be able to give us a good background of the place where the map took her. I really loved Sita throughout the book, so I'm glad you chose to focus on her character! I didn't remember very much about Sita's birth story so it was interesting to learn more about that! I can't wait to see where the map will lead Amelia next and how the flower will play into that! The images you chose for this story were perfect. I also like how you had Amelia fall into a dream to transition into the world of the Ramayana. Great job! I look forward to reading your next story!
ReplyDeleteIntroduction: My first guess about what the map leads to is the hidden city of Lanka. Since at the end of Buck’s version of Ramayana it was hidden from the world, and the map’s geographic location was only revealed while in the water next to Rama’s land bridge leading to Sri Lanka. I love this idea of a secret treasure map.
ReplyDeleteJanakpurdham: This is such a great story book you have so far!!!! I cannot wait to see where the map leads next. I love the details of how the map changes and is magical. After reading your author’s note I now know that your storybook is a story through Sita’s life, and this is such a great way to show it. I still stand by my original prediction that the map will lead to Lanka, but now I’m less sure that is where the journey ends. I wonder what Amelia has to do with going on this journey. Is she special in some way? Clearly her parents are because they are the ones that received the map. What will be the reward of this adventure? Will there be one? Why the name Amelia for the main character? Is she named after Amelia Earhart? This is such great storybook so far, I truly cannot wait to see what happens next!!!
Hi Brittany! This is my second time visiting your page, and it is even better than it was the first time I read through the storybook! Like before, it is very informative about the different locations in India that will be visited. You do a wonderful job at creating a captivating story for the reader, adapting the story and making it like a page from an adventure or fantasy novel. The main character seems to be well prepared for her adventure, though it seems as if even she is stunned by what happens every time she makes it to a location. My favorite part about your storybook, overall, would have to be the pictures. Rather than just posting one picture to give a glimpse of what happened, you use multiple, showing how the story adapts and changes as it develops. I know that as the story develops, I will be able to visualize it more with the help of the different photos you have added. On a different note, I really wish my parents had given me something like the magical map when I graduated high school, or that they will when I finally graduate college. I think you are doing an amazing job so far, and I look forward to seeing how this continues to adapt!
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ReplyDeleteI am actually from the Mythology and Folklore class, but for the extra credit assignment this week I wanted to check out some of the Indian Epic storys. I have to say, I was very impressed with your storybook! Starting with the home page, I really enjoyed how your layout matched with the theme of your tale. The sandy title bar seems very fitting for a story of an archeologist, and the image of the map is of course appropriate considering the title! Many of the storybooks I have looked through have tiny images on the home page that can be hard to see, so I appreciate that yours has a full size map.
Your introduction does a wonderful job of setting up the rest of your story. It's really cool that you found a way to link these Indian epic stories in such an exciting and intriguing manner. Who doesn't love a good treasure hunting story? The first story of the book, Janakpurdham, had me on the edge of my seat. There is such a mystery around this map, I was worried that it might lead Amelia into danger. I was glad to see that this was not the case.
Hey Brittany! First off, great name. I really love you blog layout! It is my favorite that I have seen so far! Your cover page on your story book also looks really great! Your title "Magic Map" is very simple but easily catches someones attention. The color scheme you used and the picture really go well together. Your introduction is great!! You are so creative! What a great idea for a storybook. You did a great job of really catching the readers attention and leaving some mystery. I enjoyed the letter and it really makes me look forward to reading the first story. I love the pictures you chose to use for your first story! They are so pretty and attention grabbing. The King character was very interesting. I liked their interaction with each other. Janaka's wife was also a good addition to the story! Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading the rest of your stories! Have a great rest of your week!
ReplyDeleteHey, Brittany! I am continually impressed by your work each time I read your storybook. I already commented on each part of the storybook except for your latest storybook additions so I’m going to focus on that. To start off, it was very well written. The dialogue flowed and picked up so easily from where you left off – great transition! Also, I really like how you mixed modern times with the epic so well. As you mentioned in your author’s note, you had the deer not talk in order to remain consistent with the epic which I really like, but you had a creative way of letting us know what it was thinking by being able to read its thoughts. It seems like such a fun, magical mystery and the cliffhanger at the end was a great job – I wish I had more to read! On another note, the pictures you chose were great and I like how you did more than one. I also really appreciated how they were all on the right side in a single line – I wouldn’t have thought that would have looked great, but it looked really good for your storybook. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you decided to lay out your cover page! I think that the page looks very balanced and that it allows for the eye to not feel so overwhelmed and cluttered. I really like the colors you picked and that they fit so nicely with the map picture you placed! I like that the picture is in the center of the page, I feel that when they are off to one side or the other they distract the reader from really getting all they can from the page, so great job!
ReplyDeleteWow I really love your overall theme! I wasn’t competently sure what to think the story was going to be like when I was on your cover page. I felt there were many different approached you could take. After reading your story ‘Graduation Present’ I felt that I had gained much more of an understanding! I think it is such a great idea to give the daughter the map and have her follow it and go make her own adventures. I love the idea of traveling right after completing school. Overall great job so far and I want to come back and read some more in the future!
I love your newest story in your storybook! I like your detailed description of the places she travels, and that you focus more on the places then what actually happens to her. Not only does this allow for the reader to experience the place she is in, it also allows for great cliffhangers (which is just what you have done).
ReplyDeleteI found it cool that you had the deer that took Rama away also took Amelia away to her next destination. It could be argued that the deer took Rama away to the next stage in his life's journey, and this is what the deer did for Amelia. As I was reading I did question where the deer came from because in the story he was shot by Rama after he found out he was being tricked.
I really hope that you finish your storybook because I really really really want to know what awaits Amelia at the end of her journey. I want to know why along the way each character tells her that she is special. How is she special? There is too much left unanswered for it to stop right here. I cannot wait for you next story!!
Hi Amelia,
ReplyDeleteThis was my first chance to look at your storybook page. I think your page was the best design I have seen yet. It was very aesthetically pleasing and had a continuous theme that really made it pop out to me personally. I enjoyed your central idea for your writing, and it reminded me of the idea I originally considered when trying to flesh out my storybook. One of the reasons I took this course was to better understand some of the geography and physical layout of India, so it made me happy to see someone else who was also clearly interested in it as well. I think it would be really interesting to see all of the icons from the story as statues in Janakpurdham. I think Ms. Gibbs needs to start an abroad version of this class so this can happen. They could probably use your storybook page as a preview to start their journey! I like how you used the author's note to indicate the factual information from your story, as in how there is actually a temple dedicated to Sita in Janakpurdham. Traveling to this place and seeing all of these things in real life would be like finding places dedicated to a fairy tale character. "This is where Humpty Dumpty actually came tumbling down!" Haha.
Hi Brittany! I believe this is the first time for me to visit your storybook, so I’ll read and comment on all of it. I tend to write my notes as I read, but that wasn’t the case here because: 1. It was too exciting and 2. There really weren’t any places besides a few minor things in the third story with very awkward wording or bad grammatical errors. Great details in the introduction! It builds up my excitement and anticipation well, too! All through the storybook you keep up the same level of mystery and excitement. I like how you use multiple pictures on each page. It helps to give a better idea of the setting and what’s going on. In the author’s note for the last story you talk about wondering how to finish it. Whatever happens, don’t forget to bring Amelia back to the present and give her parents’ reactions. I really like the concept you chose to explore! You do such a great job of telling an exciting adventure story! I’m anxious to see what Sita brings to Amelia and the rest of the story in the next addition. It really looks great! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHey Brittany! What with the free choices this week, I decided to revisit your storybook as I haven’t gotten to read it in the past few weeks. And—may I just say—I am still loving it!! The whole magic map/treasure hunt aspect of your story still gives me a thrill of adventure when I read your stories, and I have always loved a hint of mystery.
ReplyDeleteIn your story, “Chitrakuta Forest,” I like how you have a variety of different pictures along the side to set the scene. It really helps the reader (aka me, haha) get into the scene without you having to use overly much description. I also liked how you took a lot of creative with the appearance of the deer—who in the stories was simply golden, but you made sculpture-esque, embedded with stones and gems. And then when you went from such a gorgeous creature and made the next step on the quest a horrifying forest, the contrast really worked to your advantage, emphasizing the beauty of Sita’s favorite place (a nice touch!) and the horror of the destination to come up next. Overall, fantastic job! I cannot wait to finish reading your storybook!
Hi Brittany! I chose to read your storybook this week as one of my free choices because I had read your way earlier in the semester, and I remember just LOVING it! I love the idea of you writing about your journey of your graduation present, I think it is such an exciting idea. Your storybook is really relatable, because this very well could actually happen, I'm sure many people have gotten a trip to India for their graduation present! I chose to read your second story since I had read your first one last time. I love the images that you added, they were the first thing that I noticed. I really liked that you talked about the actually city first and then transitioned into your story about Sita and her life before Rama. I don't really remember reading about this in the readings, so it was fun to be refreshed and to learn something new. I also really like that you are telling your stories in first person, it really makes it more personable and feels like we are listening to a story that someone is actually tell you personally. You have done a GREAT job, and I have really enjoyed reading your storybook!
ReplyDeleteBrittany, I really like the set up of your storybook. I think your introduction is endearing and kind of pulls ties on my heart when you speak about her parents. Your are doing a great job of pulling your readers in here! I think that is such a sweet way to start out your story, with her parents giving her the gift of not only travel, but also the opportunity to fulfill their unfinished adventure!
ReplyDeleteI like the image you have added for your first story. It could have been a little larger, but I can still tell what you are trying to show us! All of the details you have added to your story are just so creative. The talons on the compass and just all of your descriptions of your surroundings are just amazing. You are giving your readers a great opportunity to truly understand the story and where we are placed.
Ahh! She dreams too! So interesting. I love all of the details and creativity you place in your stories. I would have never thought to write a story like this. You must be a writing major of some kind. Or maybe you are just gifted. Maybe both!
Reading your author’s note on your first story: I did not know that temple was really present and dedicated to Sita. How cool that you would take such aspects into consideration. I cant wait to read more about Sita’s life in your eyes!
ReplyDeleteSkimming over your other stories so I can get a full understanding of what is going on:
I just love how you incorporated the deer in your story. The fact that you have taken such attention to upholding certain details of the original story (the deer, the river..etc.) in your own really adds a more realistic theme!
When the deer took our character into the clouds and things began shape-shifting I was a little lost… I wanted this story to be more of a realistic take of what a real person could do with their time traveling in India, however I still think you are telling an incredible story. I liked when she said “yes I realize I sound crazy at this point.” That kind of helped me understand that this was all new to her and she realized it did not seem real. It helps the reader really feel closer to her! I think you are doing such a terrific job and I cannot wait to see where Sita ends up in your final story!
Hi Brittany! Since we had the free choice of any of the storybooks in the class, I decided to revisit your page to check on the progress that you've made since last I saw it. When I read your intro before, it definitely caught my attention. I love traveling, so a story involving someone with a magic map and unlimited funds sounded like it was right up my alley. As I said before, the design and layout of your storybook looks great. It's easy on the eyes and reads well, though you might want to proofread your stories again just to correct a few of the minor structural mistakes I noticed while reading. It was smart to focus your storybook on Sita. You've done a great job of staying centered on her while providing readers with information about other places and people we came to know throughout the epic. Overall, I think your storybook is a huge success. It was fun, adventurous, and it managed to keep me on my toes as I joined the main character on her strange journey. I think I need to find some patents like hers! :P Keep up the good work--the semester is almost through!
ReplyDeleteHi Brittany! This is my second trip to your storybook about the Magic Map and I am glad that I returned to comment on your storybook again! I love traveling a lot, even though I do not have much time to travel, so naturally, your storybook was of interest to me. I can see your passion to travel throughout your storybook and your creativeness is really shown in all of your stories and introduction. Your design and layout looks great, just like last time! I think it looks really cool to see your completed storybook because it shows how much hard work and effort you have put into it over the semester. Your color choice for both your blog and your storybook is really nice as well. It gives it a warm feeling that is easy to have in the background while reading your creative stories! I like how you focus your storybook on Sita. I think she is such a dynamic character that it is easy to follow and get creative with her. Overall, I think your storybook is really one of the best I have read so far. From the layout, to the introduction, your storybook shows your passion for travel and creativeness!
ReplyDeleteHey Brittany! I really enjoyed this storybook. This had a really great theme and really can get the readers interested in what is going on. I remember the first time I came to just read the introduction. I was in awe at how much it was better compared to mine, but now I just see that you did a hundred times better than mine. This was a really great storybook and the theme was quite unique, which always kept the readers interested. The stories you chose to tell took the readers through parts of the Ramayana in manners that I haven’t heard before. My favorite story out of the three was the story of Hanuman. I just really enjoyed Hanuman’s story because he is one of my favorite characters and the dialogue for him is exactly like what I would expect from him. I also really enjoyed the story of the deer. In the actual story the deer is killed, but you rather chose to keep it alive and lead Amelia to its next location. That was quite interesting and really added to the storybook. I can’t believe how much your storybook has developed and how great of a job you have done. This was one of the greatest storybooks I have read so far.
ReplyDeleteHey good afternoon Brittany! I just finished reading your Storybook and I have to say, it was absolutely fantastic. First off I really liked the background, it really made the explorer vibe noticeable. It also wasn’t anything super colorful or abrasive like some storybooks. The format also made it easy to navigate and go from one story to the next. Your choice of font was well chosen as well, It made the reading easy on the eyes and wasn’t anything too hard to difficult to decipher. As for the story, the imagery and creativity truly pulled me in. The touring around these beautiful places made me want to travel along the map myself. I feel as though you highlighted the character’s feelings very well. I was able to actually connect and imagine the characters feelings of wonderment. The pictures you chose to add to each story was great because you could actually put an image to the awesome things you described. All the pictures were also very high quality and were for the most part pictures I had never seen before. One thing I do wish you would have added to the story was the conversation of Amelia and Sita. It was a real pleasure reading your Storybook. Best of luck with the rest of the semester.
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